. From:
. Sarah Klinger
. 1250 East Arques Avenue
. Sunnyvale, CA
. USA
. 94085
.. Sarah Klinger
. 1250 East Arques Avenue
. Sunnyvale, CA
. USA
. 94085
4th December 2008
To: L3 Advertising
115 Bowery 3/F
New York, NY 10002
USA
94085
Dear L3 Advertising!
Complaint letter
I want to complain how women are presented in your advertise.
The way I see it, today every woman has got the freedom of speech and the chance to go working instead doing the chores, it is an unbounded cheek to put the women back in front of the cooker in your advertises!
When I was watching television, suddenly the film got disturbed by some advertising spots. It was really conspicuous, how many household articles were shown there and there always were women only, presenting these products. In my opinion, you should not forget the fact, that all has been changing, hasn’t it? Above all the typical roles of men and women have changed. Today also the woman is earning money and the man is looking after the kids. I dare to say, that housemen could be as good as women, but their self confidence is not getting higher, if they have to see this perfect women in the advertising every day. He maybe feels unaccepted, because according to the television, only women are the experts in the household.
In the end I can say, that I am very glad about the changing from past to now. I am also sure, that it would be better to support house men, instead discriminate women and try to bring them back to their old roles!
Fatihfully yours
Sarah K.
1 Kommentar:
letter of complaint
Instead of 'letter of complaint" you could also be more specific: 'Complaint about the presentation of women in commercials'.
to complain about how ...
to advertise, advertisement, commercial (on TV!), advertising (Reklame)
the household chores
exp: "suddenly the film got disturbed by some advertising spots"
exp/str: "how many household articles were shown there and there always were women only, presenting these products"
exp: " that all has been changing, hasn’t it" --> What does 'all' refer to? Your question tag is not good here.
tense: For facts you use present simple, not continuous.
exp: "their self confidence is not getting higher"
grammar: those perfect women
gr: They maybe feel ... (You talked about men before.)
the change from the past until now
str: instread of discriminating (against) ... and trying ...
exp: " to bring them back to their old roles"
faithfully
The letter structure is good (but 'for' and 'to' is not needed). You've got a bit of a problem with expressing your thoughts. It often sounds a bit unnatural the way you express the idea.
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